Bug in payment system, when you pay the debt using the large payment it takes your money and only counts it as the small one the 25 percent instead of the 75 I think.
If you have enough negative relations with Claire it would be neat if she got more aggressive in sex more demeaning or harsh, maybe compare you to others if you whored her out to Vito or Todd it would be a neat change, Longer endings would be nice too, instead of just the rundowns, along with more choices in sex scenes for what you want to do, though if the plan is for everything to have an animation that may be difficult to do. If you’re Claire maybe people can comment about you having a husband, or asking if they’re better than Paul.
I’ve been watching this game grow for a while, and I like it the animation and art are top notch it's really hot, and it’s also really grown in quality over the years, but I have to say the writing for scenes is a weak spot. I do some writing myself and I think it would be a good improvement if you explored the player character's thoughts more maybe as one step, as in many scenes we don't really see how they feel about what happens, and more descriptive writing would also help, there's lots of dialogue but not a lot of telling what's happening, how it looks like, what are your surroundings like, and how that feels for you and the other person banging you, or if someone if watching (like Claire or Paul in the beginning scenes) what are their reactions. Which I think is important, because of how wonderful the art is this lack of descriptive language and detailed writing isn't as terrible as it would be since the sound and art makes up for it kinda, but this is still a visual novel the writing is a key component, and right now though the visuals are stunning the novel could be better. Making scenes longer and more detailed and enjoyable through improving the writing is something that should be looked at.
I don't want to be an asshole and knock Leo Nois's hard work It’s just the writing is something I think could be improved upon that hasn't seen much development as much as other aspects of the game, Some other things I thought might be good is introduction to scenes since we seem to just jump right into the sex usually, or the option to just talk to characters, ask them about their day, their life what they’re into, stories, whatever fits for some.
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Are you considering different translations, like Spanish?
Bug in payment system, when you pay the debt using the large payment it takes your money and only counts it as the small one the 25 percent instead of the 75 I think.
If you have enough negative relations with Claire it would be neat if she got more aggressive in sex more demeaning or harsh, maybe compare you to others if you whored her out to Vito or Todd it would be a neat change, Longer endings would be nice too, instead of just the rundowns, along with more choices in sex scenes for what you want to do, though if the plan is for everything to have an animation that may be difficult to do. If you’re Claire maybe people can comment about you having a husband, or asking if they’re better than Paul.
I’ve been watching this game grow for a while, and I like it the animation and art are top notch it's really hot, and it’s also really grown in quality over the years, but I have to say the writing for scenes is a weak spot. I do some writing myself and I think it would be a good improvement if you explored the player character's thoughts more maybe as one step, as in many scenes we don't really see how they feel about what happens, and more descriptive writing would also help, there's lots of dialogue but not a lot of telling what's happening, how it looks like, what are your surroundings like, and how that feels for you and the other person banging you, or if someone if watching (like Claire or Paul in the beginning scenes) what are their reactions. Which I think is important, because of how wonderful the art is this lack of descriptive language and detailed writing isn't as terrible as it would be since the sound and art makes up for it kinda, but this is still a visual novel the writing is a key component, and right now though the visuals are stunning the novel could be better. Making scenes longer and more detailed and enjoyable through improving the writing is something that should be looked at.
I don't want to be an asshole and knock Leo Nois's hard work It’s just the writing is something I think could be improved upon that hasn't seen much development as much as other aspects of the game, Some other things I thought might be good is introduction to scenes since we seem to just jump right into the sex usually, or the option to just talk to characters, ask them about their day, their life what they’re into, stories, whatever fits for some.